As promised...I FIXED IT!!!! Please read the re-write

I tweaked the first section of my novel so I'm editing this to read that section. Even if you've read this post already please read the re-write and as always feedback is very welcome!

Excerpt

Morning found Evelyn Jones in the study of her Victorian Mansion staring at her laptop in great frustration. As she stared she scrolled through her latest manuscript fixing minor errors and adding scenes. There was a knock at the door, Evelyn stiffened and clicked save after which she locked her laptop and the case file along with all the papers sitting on the desk in the wall safe hidden behind the self-portrait of her great-grandmother which hung above the fireplace. Evelyn walked back to the desk and opened the first drawer to the right drawing her father’s ivory handled pistol, she cocked it, grabbed the voice recorder sitting next to her laptop and clicked it to a new track she called

            “Come in.” as she walked cautiously toward the door. No one was there. She stood and made her way slowly toward the door, the pistol down by her side, but ready to fire if necessary. She stood to the right of the giant double doors and swung it wide and raised the gun stepping into the middle of the door.

            “I was wondering when you’d figure out that it was me,” a silky female voice drawled from the hallway.

            “You? I’ve known that you engineered it from the start.”

            “Have you then? Where is your honour guard?”

            “They’re not my honour guard they’re my brothers, I’m perfectly capable of taking care of myself and what business is it of yours where they are?”

            “Oh no business of mine per say, why don’t you step out into the hallway and kick the pistol over to me, we can discuss this in a civilized manner.”

            “Not on your life dearie, I’m not coming out there unarmed so you can shoot me.”

            “Oh and I want to come in there when I know you’re pointing a pistol at me I assure you I am unarmed and alone.” Evelyn didn’t believe her in the slightest but against her better judgement she stepped out of the study and shut the door behind her. She looked down the hall both ways and came face to face with her foe who carried an old revolver.

            “Look, I don’t want to hurt you,”

            “Likewise, but you leave me no choice.” Evelyn cracked the door of the study open behind her and bent down to slide her gun along the floor. When she stood she was, in fact, unarmed, mostly, before she could react her adversary fired and the bullet struck her in the shoulder and ran, The last thing Evelyn saw before she passed out was Michael, Albert and Henry racing towards her as she hit the ground. As she hit the ground her last thought before blacking out was “How did this even happen? How did I get this involved in the case?”

So...New year...Shadow of Night By Deborah Harkness

It's a brand new year and yes I'm a little late on the draw for this one. I am going to start reviewing books on my blog because I am an avid reader and I never turn down the opportunity to praise or...I hesitate to say criticize...a book based on my own opinions. Over the holidays I did a RIDICULOUS amount of reading. I read the 2nd book in the All Souls Trilogy: Shadow of Night. I found it interesting and totally engrossing from the start. It starts out where it left off. No extraneous time has passed and they are in Elizabethan England right where Diana had meant to take them. There are a lot of new characters in this book as well as a fair few famous faces like Elizabeth I, William Shakespeare, Christopher Marlowe and Walter Raleigh. The adventures of Diana and Matthew through Elizabethan England with their newfound friends takes a few unexpected turns and the book keeps you riveted all the way through. I however would not recommend reading it all in one sitting unless you have a lot of time on your hands. It's a fairly thick book and reading it all in one would take Hours. I am currently reading A Game of Thrones by George R. R. Martin and I find it is very interesting and riveting as well. It is 835 pages strong and very detailed. However if you can keep track of all the details you are fine. You also need to keep track of characters as they come and go from chapter to chapter. On the whole a very good book and I am hoping to read the next one when I am finished. Well TTFN and Keep reading. Remember you never lose the friends that you make in books. They stay true to you forever. Keep reading and if you are so inclined write as the saying goes "If there has not yet been a book written that you wish to read then you must write it." And Always remember Random Word capitalization makes for Variety in your Sentences.